Mistakes

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ok well this is a song i wrote about things that happen we didnt want to happen, and how people keep trying to fix them and they should not because they happen. it is in the PAST let them stay there. Mainly war like crap and what have you.

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Lyrics

Lost and confused
I need some help to find myself
I am lost and confused
No one to ease me through

We are people we make mistakes
We try to fix them but not embrace
We are people we make mistakes
We try to fix them but not embrace

Weman crying babies dying
In the middle of a war
I look to you for direction
you give meback a blank stare

We are people we make mistakes
We try to fix them but not embrace
We are people we make mistakes
We try to fix them but not embrace

I ask forgivness but i'm not heard
My god forsakes me
He leaves me all alone
With out a map to find my home

We are people we make mistakes
We try to fix them but not embrace
We are people we make mistakes
We try to fix them but not embrace

Song Stats

Hits: 1498
Comments: 5
Fans: 1
Plays: 83
Downloads: 75
Votes: 3
Uploaded: Jul 08, 2005 - 08:38:49 AM
Last Updated: Jul 08, 2005 - 01:19:19 AM Last Played: Feb 27, 2012 - 04:52:40 AM

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Hardware:

i ran my voice through my ds-1 distortion pedal. the bass is a Fender Squire 20 aniversary.
(i know i caint spell so please shut up :) )

Software:

I used some loops from garage band and edited some of them up a little in here.

Comments

abstractreality	abstractreality said 2876 days ago (July 8th, 2005)
	Dark picture The song's pretty dark, too. You seem to feel strongly about people trying to fix mistakes. At least they try. Some people don't bother to. Check out my latest song called Chascade

markdh	markdh said 2876 days ago (July 8th, 2005)
	Dark picture Well I really don't like dwelling in the past. but if you went and had got a girl pregnant at a young age you should defiantly fix it. it is just people need to not dwell on little shit you know what I mean. any way thanks for listing. Check out my latest song called Human Disgrace

virtualruffy

virtualruffy said 2870 days ago (July 14th, 2005)

not a bad start
The points I would recomend work on are
1) your voice is WAY too distorted. ease down on the distort. One option might be to use the distortion on certain stanzas to emphasize them over the other lyrics.
2) in keeping with making some lyrics stand out. heres no difference in the tone of the song. its one speed, one sound, one tone all the way through. A song needs changes in tempo to draw attention or to ease it. It gets monotonous.
3) so, you could go for an angrier sound or spice it up. You could keep with the sound you have which is kind of along the goth lines or some of marilyn manson.
you definetly show promise just a lot of technical areas to address.

Check out my latest song called Nibiru Lost (mj space race 2011)

DaSimpill1	DaSimpill1 said 2826 days ago (August 27th, 2005)
	good song.... but i agree with ruffy (on some points) the voice dose get a bit droning, if you could screem the second half of the chorus it could spice up the track a bit. I like it tho, nice and dark. Check out my latest song called Little Silver Box O Trix

	said 2795 days ago (September 27th, 2005)
	Yes I like it, true it repeats, but not so long that you get tired of tune. Distorted vocals fit fine.

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Name: Mark Hatchell
Location: Alexandria VA United States

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