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A song that I wrote to cope with some heavy break ups. Thanks for listening...
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fourteen hundred hours,
we don't have to be,
I can feel you always,
taking every part of me.
and sunsets speak softly,
right before they bleed,
and I can feel you always,
taking every part of me...
and what will you wait for?
a glimce of hope,
from a flaccid dream?
this inadvertent torture,
when people say,
what they don't mean.
and I swear I heard you scream...
"this is the last time,
this is the last time that I try.
this is the last time,
this is the last time that I'll cry,
this is the last time, here tonight..."
because anymore we say now,
"nothing is to be."
holding on forever,
diverting everything...
and sunsets speak softly,
right before they bleed,
and I can feel you ever,
taking every part of me...
and what will you wait for?
a glimce of hope,
from a flaccid dream?
this inadvertent torture,
when people say,
what they don't mean.
and I swear I heard you scream...
"this is the last time,
this is the last time that I try.
this is the last time,
this is the last time to decide,
this is the last time, here tonight..."
so make it right...
right away...
we don't have to be,
I can feel you always,
taking every part of me.
and sunsets speak softly,
right before they bleed,
and I can feel you always,
taking every part of me...
and what will you wait for?
a glimce of hope,
from a flaccid dream?
this inadvertent torture,
when people say,
what they don't mean.
and I swear I heard you scream...
"this is the last time,
this is the last time that I try.
this is the last time,
this is the last time that I'll cry,
this is the last time, here tonight..."
because anymore we say now,
"nothing is to be."
holding on forever,
diverting everything...
and sunsets speak softly,
right before they bleed,
and I can feel you ever,
taking every part of me...
and what will you wait for?
a glimce of hope,
from a flaccid dream?
this inadvertent torture,
when people say,
what they don't mean.
and I swear I heard you scream...
"this is the last time,
this is the last time that I try.
this is the last time,
this is the last time to decide,
this is the last time, here tonight..."
so make it right...
right away...
Production is clear to my ears. Good melody. Your singing is strong and
emotive.
I was thinking that it might sound more interesting and provide more
contrast to change the vocal production on the "this is the last time" part
- maybe bring them up a little or maybe add some instrument ... electric
guitar amybe? I think that the piano loop you chose works well as a coda
here.