morning star arises (draft)

chipan

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Just a draft. This isn't really jazz fusion in my opinion, but I couldn't decide on a better genre to put it in. (see Drakonis' genre description below)
I played all the parts on an Alesis keyboard except the drums of course. I actually decided this time to start with drums and get musical ideas from just the rhythm. It was kind of an experiment, but once it got going I couldn't stop.
I would appreciate any advice and comments. Be critical :) Thanks,
chip

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Lyrics

"Until the day dawns and the morning star arises in your hearts."

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Hits: 822
Comments: 9
Fans: 3
Plays: 88
Downloads: 60
Votes: 2
Uploaded: Jul 23, 2007 - 09:50:18 PM
Last Updated: Jul 25, 2007 - 08:06:16 PM Last Played: Nov 17, 2009 - 06:19:41 AM

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piano (715), fusion (121), sitar (18), ambient (613), morning star arises (1)

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ceilidh	ceilidh said 856 days ago (July 24th, 2007)
	hiya very pleasant listening, especially like that (is it indian?) string instrument, it has truly great sound in here. it is like a spice, making the tune more savoury and hot. very nice. Check out my latest song called Gartan Mother's Lullaby

chipan	chipan said 855 days ago (July 25th, 2007)
	Thank you for your kind words and for listening! The instrument is a sitar which is an Indian string instrument analogous to the guitar. I debated about whether or not this was the sound I wanted, but no other instruments seemed to fit. Thanks again. chip here is more than you wanted to know about the sitar... http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sitar Check out my latest song called Psalm 107

drakonis

drakonis said 856 days ago (July 24th, 2007)

definitely fusion...
nice little sprinkles of different genres... I would almost call it JazzProgFusionPopBollyBoogieRock, but luckily they don't let me name genres.

The musical ideas in here were enjoyable to listen to, fun and upbeat. The mix was clear, and your instrumentation was clean, you didn't pour the kitchen sink in. My critiques would be that the drums seemed very slightly loud in the mix, and the sitar and piano were panned a little far off to the left and right, so that in headphones it felt a little unbalanced when they came in. And your whispered lines are very soft... you ought to boost that up, I think it would add a lot, maybe even have it in a couple places, not just at the end. But overall this is a nice piece. Did you write it note-by-note, play the piano, use loops? Adding information in the description about what software and hardware you used and how you made the music will help me critique it more accurately. And welcome to Macjams, Hajimemashite!
ttfn,
Drakonis

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chipan

chipan said 855 days ago (July 25th, 2007)

Hajimemashite
Thanks for you kind words and the helpful comments! The drums are of course looped, but I played everything else on the keyboard (of course I doctored up the timing and spliced here and there etc.). I purposely panned the sitar and piano in different places mainly because I know very little about mixing and someone once told me something about dividing up the instruments. Anyway your comment is noted and I think I agree. I'll try messing with the vocal track as well.
Your genre placement made me laugh and yet it was surprisingly accurate :) I noticed it now has a rating of 6 in the genre. I guess that's macjam's fault for having such narrow genres. Kidding of course! Thanks again for your long comment and for listening.
chip

Check out my latest song called Psalm 107

guitapick

guitapick said 852 days ago (July 28th, 2007)

I love the patience...
...and the way you weave the instruments in and out with the theme. Cool voices with delay, towards the end.

If I may offer a suggestion (I always feel strange about that...but you asked):

I believe that's a sitar sound? It's carrying the melody. Maybe experiment with a bit more volume/mid/bass and a tad of delay to make it stand out a little more? It's a really fine melody and perfect for the song.

But...this is my first visit here and maybe I shouldn't be so forward? Sorry, if so. I really like the tune. Very happy to have made your acquaintance...

Bob

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chipan

chipan said 851 days ago (July 29th, 2007)

Thanks Bob
I appreciate your comments and I will try to adjust the sitar sound as you suggested and see what happens. Please don't apologize for giving advice. That's the kind of feedback I want to hear, so thanks very much! It's interesting you mentioned patience. I was so tempted to throw in a lot of stuff in the beginning. Actually I still may change the beginning a little, but this time I liked waiting before bringing in the other instruments.
About weaving the instruments in and out, I have always liked songs that have two or three themes which eventually get intertwined.
Thanks again for listening and I am pleased to meet you as well!
chip

Check out my latest song called Psalm 107

Ibstrat	Ibstrat said 735 days ago (November 22nd, 2007)
	That's a great tune- very musical,nice chord progression.I really like the whole thing except maybe the sitar.I'd like to hear it with a nylon string or maybe electric guitar in octaves.(Of course i am rather partial to guitars!)Excellent song though-you've got talent! Check out my latest song called Blues in Bm

chipan

chipan said 722 days ago (December 5th, 2007)

Sitar
Thanks for your comments about this old post! I appreciate the listen. To be honest I have decided I don't like the sitar too much either. At the very least it is too loud. I was just experimenting at the time and I didn't like the timbre of the other instruments in my palette. I much prefer guitar myself too. Thanks again for the listen and kind comments.
chip

Check out my latest song called Psalm 107

Char	Char said 403 days ago (October 19th, 2008)
	LOL! Drakonis! I am sorry I haven't found you before this. But, now I have. Brilliant. Good choices on everything. You are very gifted. Thanks. Check out my latest song called Break Away (Mark Holbrook & Awigze)

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