beautiful wall (with Einarus)

Mystified

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When Einarus posted his track "Musica's Box," I immediately heard a haunting, children's song sort of vibe to it.

Music boxes have always fascinated me--sounding both delicately gentle and somehow sad.

In this vein, I've set some ghostly, gothic lyrics to Ein's track. Thank you, Einarus, for letting me add to this!! :)

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Lyrics

I'll build a beautiful wall
To keep you out
I'll build a beautiful wall
Around this tattered heart

I'll build a beautiful wall
To keep me in
I'll build a beautiful wall
And you will see...

A wall of roses with prickly thorns
A moat of molten glass surrounding
Curtains of briars
And shards of dreams

I'll build a beautiful wall....

Song Stats

Hits: 1803
Comments: 49
Fans: 35
Plays: 251
Downloads: 64
Votes: 13
Uploaded: May 01, 2008 - 09:35:59 AM
Last Updated: May 01, 2008 - 02:32:59 PM Last Played: Nov 25, 2009 - 04:51:04 PM

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Mystified (163), sbc (68), Einarus (10), Musica's Box (1), music box (3), haunting (26), lullaby (53)

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Comments

	said 575 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	Beautiful (as the title suggests)

Mystified	Mystified said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	thanks, b :) Check out my latest song called For the Beauty of the Earth

composerclark	composerclark said 575 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	Ahh... Very beautiful indeed, and haunting, like a Grimm's bros. fairy tale. I'm impressed, as always! Check out my latest song called Scarlet Nightfall

Mystified	Mystified said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	Grimm's...and grim fairy tales... ...which was exactly the mood I was going for here. (The picture was sort of a giveaway...) Thank you for the kind words :) Check out my latest song called For the Beauty of the Earth

magnatone	magnatone said 575 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	Beautiful Wall WOW you two! Love mysti's vox addition - this is gorgeous! Check out my latest song called Symphonic Smackdown

Mystified	Mystified said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	Thank you, Karen Glad you like this one :) Check out my latest song called For the Beauty of the Earth

Roxylee	Roxylee said 575 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	wow, this works so well Childlike, yet chilling at the same tine. Beautifully sung, as always. :-) Check out my latest song called Sweet Grace

Mystified	Mystified said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	Aren't most lullabys... ...chilling and childlike? An interesting combo! Thank you for stopping by and leaving a comment, Roxylee :) Check out my latest song called For the Beauty of the Earth

said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)

beautiful wall
I am beginning to love you sooo much and your lovely voice is so captivating you are a really lovely beautiful spirit and I can hear this in your words and in you singing. Mystified.

You sing so beutifuly and I feel soo good after listening to your lovely singing. I would also like to thank you cat for your very nice kind words to me on chat when at times I have been feeling so low and you say such nice kind words to me too.
You may think its gone in one ear and out the other but i have took note
anyhow. I think you are also a lovely person and a very good beautiful singer and an outstanding performer. And Einrus has done you proud
put wings also to your song Well done you guys. its sounded brilliant.

Peace Dee xxx

Mystified	Mystified said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	thank you Dee I appreciate your thoughts here. (Say kind words to yourself often, too! ;) Thanks again to Einarus, for the beautiful track I built the vocals upon. Check out my latest song called For the Beauty of the Earth

drakonis

drakonis said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)

Terrible song!
(Ha, got your attention!) Cat, your singing and lyric additions to this are beautiful, as always. However, it did feel like the lyrics were packed a little too tightly... you started singing almost right away, with no musical intro... I would have preferred an intro 4 bars of musical theme before you start, then I wanted this stretched out, with a breather between each of your lines, so they would sink in and breathe, and allow you time to do more of your ethereal background vox in between the lines... but of course, this critique simply means that I adore what you and Einar came up with, and I just wanted it stretched out to go longer. My only lyrical suggestion is the word "prickly" seemed almost trite to me, I would have preferred a more ambiguous/meaningful word, not sure what though, maybe "dang'rous" or "poisonous" or instead of "prickly thorns", "thorns and wires" (rhymes with briars, and infers separation-via-technology).

Anyway, you always get my creative thoughts flying, excellent work!
ttfn,
Drakonis

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Mystified

Mystified said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)

prickly...
I'm going to reply to your comments first, Drak, because you actually brought up some things I considered when approaching this song.
As for the length, I tried it in various ways, delaying starting to sing, etc. Quite simply, as a vocal piece, it does need to be longer. But as I told Einarus, I didn't want to do the additions myself.
So it stands as a vocal 'vignette'--a piece of a piece, as it were.
As for the phrase 'prickly throrns,' I did try 'poison/poisonous/tainted' this, that and the other, but eventually went for the onomatopoeic 'prickly' and the organic 'thorns' as I wanted that simple--perhaps even simplistic--visual associated with it.

I'm glad you enjoyed this, and took time to leave a comment.
Thank you!

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lengold	lengold said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	I think it's impossible for you to do something not wonderful. Cheers Len Check out my latest song called Dodgy Doughnut

Mystified	Mystified said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	:) Thank you, Len. Very kind words--I'm glad you enjoyed this song. Check out my latest song called For the Beauty of the Earth

tokai	tokai said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	It is a beautiful, great song with lovely vocals. Check out my latest song called maizuru/Bud/Char

Mystified	Mystified said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	thank you, tokai thanks for taking time to leave a comment :) Check out my latest song called For the Beauty of the Earth

Moviz	Moviz said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	Short and sweet. I like the smoothness and fluidity in your voice alongside the harsh (but pleasant)brittle tinkling of the music... it adds a vulnerable feel to it....like someone hurt having a mental conversation about..... someone who's hurt them. Enjoyed, regards M Check out my latest song called Come Back Billie

Mystified	Mystified said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	those mental conversations... I did purposely try to create a fragility to the voice; I'm glad you heard that. Thank you for stopping by and taking time to leave a comment. Check out my latest song called For the Beauty of the Earth

Reinholt56	Reinholt56 said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	Oh my..... This is to me, quite simply, perfect. The music and the words fit together as a hand in a glove. I don't 'hear' anything else. There are few pieces on here that I would give, if I voted, straight 10's, but this would be one of them. Two magical artistes doing something wonderfully well. Take care. Paul Check out my latest song called Ambient Soundscape #1

Mystified	Mystified said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	Thank you, Paul I appreciate your comments and your support. Thank you. Check out my latest song called For the Beauty of the Earth

DWL	DWL said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	Perfectly formed said what it had to say and left. Beautifully done. Cheers Dick Check out my latest song called A Good Night's Sleep with Macferret, Sir Dennis Crowther and Pete Young

Mystified	Mystified said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	Thank you, Dick There is something liberating in doing a song that has its own 'say.' Sure, it broke a few rules (it's really short, there's no real intro...) But in a way it makes it all the more unusual, and that's fine by me. Check out my latest song called For the Beauty of the Earth

Feter	Feter said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	beautiful wall this is so sweet ...your singin so awesome here the music a true heartfelt one ..one of the sweetest colabs my freind .I think this is your best style you invest your sweet voice with ..thnx alot for sharin such gem !! Check out my latest song called A Night With Feter feat'(Roxylee sloparts crissew johnwhitehead and Yamin AL Yamani )

Mystified	Mystified said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	Thank you, Feter I always appreciate your comments. I do enjoy singing in this style as well. It seems the most 'natural' for me. Thanks for stopping by for a listen, and for leaving your thoughts. Check out my latest song called For the Beauty of the Earth

Peter Bauckham	Peter Bauckham said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	I found this really haunting. I agree with your comment about music boxes. I don't have a problem with the lyrics (perhaps I would have preferred a longer intro) but the overall song is just great as it is... Peter Check out my latest song called All The Same (CBGB) (Last Chance Challenge)

Mystified	Mystified said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	music boxes... ...just what is it about them..? Thank you, Peter, for letting me know that you enjoyed this song. :) Check out my latest song called For the Beauty of the Earth

gail60	gail60 said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	so good Such a simple sound transformed into more mystery. You sing so beautifully as always. Great collab. Thanks for sharing it with us Check out my latest song called Sweet September

elfdaughter	elfdaughter said 574 days ago (May 1st, 2008)
	Stunning Stunning as ever, Mysti! Check out my latest song called Carol of the Bells 2009

	said 574 days ago (May 2nd, 2008)
	You did this exactly right. No need for intro's or changed lyrics It is perfect as is If I were to remix this, it would sound exactly the same :-) b

Morning Light	Morning Light said 573 days ago (May 2nd, 2008)
	:)* I love you vox with the bells ......beautiful Check out my latest song called Morning Rose

Estella	Estella said 573 days ago (May 2nd, 2008)
	gorgeous! don't know that I'd heard you before, but I think I would have remembered! You have a beautiful voice! I wandered over here from einarus's original piece. I almost didn't want to hear it b/c I thought his piece was so perfect on its own, but you really did it justice and what a charming voice you have! I'm glad I listened. Check out my latest song called Este Momento

I. Spike	I. Spike said 573 days ago (May 2nd, 2008)
	Your new scary movie... This so forlorn, scary, haunting and just plain neat-o! Great track and very cool vocals! ...and again, just the right length.... I'm left wanting more, but I shall have none.... I guess I could just listen to it again, eh...? Check out my latest song called Mighty Cracker Fly

sloparts	sloparts said 573 days ago (May 3rd, 2008)
	Haunting lyrics that wrap you in a cocoon of love overpowering fear. This is almost magical Cat the way you weave those lyrics around and you voice is as clear as crystal. Lovely singing, great lyrics, and a simple musical path played out on the toy piano. Fantastic. Thank you for sharing this Ed Check out my latest song called Just a little Something

Norman Goodman

Norman Goodman said 571 days ago (May 4th, 2008)

vocals reminded me of Rowanne Mark
Has a hauntingly beautiful vocal line ( Awesome voice by the way ). Great bed, song has an interesting vibe to it. The singing and keys are so "pleasant" sounding, yet the note choices created a feeling unease and a palpable sense of foreboding . I thought it was very well done and very clever, to convey such vivid musical imagery is real talent unto itself.

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kassia

kassia said 571 days ago (May 4th, 2008)

Indeed
Very haunting. I LOVE the lyrics - the contradiction between the beautiful/tattered and beautiful/prickly/shards. Wonderful word choice. I think your lyrics fit the sounds perfectly - the childlike innocence and beauty of the music box compared to the more menacing realities of life and the world out there! As always your vocals are beautiful. My ear was waiting to hear a little reverb/echo in there - kind of as if you were singing within and behind that beautiful wall. Does that make sense? lol Great addition to Einarus' music. Thanks!

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davisamerica	davisamerica said 571 days ago (May 4th, 2008)
	right then have been waiting for this since chat conversation a few nites ago .. so worth the wait... and it is a beauty Check out my latest song called No Son(egobandit band)

that80sboy	that80sboy said 571 days ago (May 5th, 2008)
	nice! very pretty voice and light on the ears...i like it! Check out my latest song called please save me

rustykangaroo

rustykangaroo said 571 days ago (May 5th, 2008)

music boxes.........brilliant!!!!!!!!!!
haunting vocals fit beautifully, a creative concept which reminds me of tim burton's collaborator/composer danny elfman. i also enjoy lullaby songs and have written one or two on my acoustic but hard to beat the atmosphere you've created here. i want more lyrics and more of everthing really but anything good always leaves you wanting more, and its true to the spirit of a music box that way, kudos to you (or you two) for realizing that and not overdoing it. but i would still encourage an alternate just to give us more to love.

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jiguma

jiguma said 570 days ago (May 5th, 2008)

Lovely collab!
I love the music box sounds Einar - ironically they always give me dark vibes rather than happy ones. Beautiful singing Cat.

I agree with Eduard on the way the vocals start straight up before the mood is set by the music, but a minor nit.

It seemed to me (and no-one else has mentioned it, so feel free to ignore me) that the mix was a little hot - the vocals especially seemed to lack the clarity that would have worked so well here. With the delicate music box sounds, a delicate sparse arrangement might have sounded good.

Again, a minor nit though - a lovely interpretation.

Neil

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jefferson987	jefferson987 said 569 days ago (May 6th, 2008)
	wow That was incredible. 10's across the board! Check out my latest song called Rick

echoroom	echoroom said 569 days ago (May 7th, 2008)
	I love great titles This is a great title, and a similarly great track - really haunting. Your voice is fabulous on this - icy and sensual. steve Check out my latest song called Deeper (w/t Racerat)

	said 568 days ago (May 8th, 2008)
	Great! Deep vocals over an awesome soundbed. This is amazing piece Ms. Cat. WOW... Thanks for sharing! Take Care - Yeman A. Al-Rawi

Confounded	Confounded said 565 days ago (May 10th, 2008)
	Emotional Perfectly written vocal line, and the simple and very nice background play and the atmosphere has made a very well produced song from it. My only suggestion is about the other line which you used it near ending, it was somehow a litlle scary or mystic for this peaceful song. Very well, Thanks. Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)

dirigent	dirigent said 565 days ago (May 11th, 2008)
	Beautiful wall Magic voice, an enchanting track, I'm magnetized - awesome work :-) :-) :-) Check out my latest song called Autumn

guitapick	guitapick said 563 days ago (May 12th, 2008)
	.... ...the innocent glockenspeil is the perfect choice with your lovely voice singing such guarded sadness... Check out my latest song called Outside the Corral

thetiler	thetiler said 561 days ago (May 14th, 2008)
	Gorgeous ! E, you sure can compose interesting tunes! Of course doesn't hurt to have such sweet singing! Check out my latest song called Little Drummer Boy Variations

richardhowardjones	richardhowardjones said 554 days ago (May 21st, 2008)
	climbing I love it. Makes me feel like climbing. I'm sure whoever's inside that wall has a lot more to say. Best wishes Rich Check out my latest song called STANDIN' IN THE RAIN

EEFliess	EEFliess said 550 days ago (May 25th, 2008)
	wow... as soft and sweet as a lullaby Check out my latest song called Rock and a Hard Place (With Adam Clarke) (extended, new drums)

loricunningham	loricunningham said 306 days ago (January 24th, 2009)
	Perfect vocals Perfect vocals to fit the mood of the track. Love the light harmonies in the background too. Check out my latest song called Thoughts of You (Emeria song)