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Keywords:
melancholy (56), sad (129), regret (26), death (130)
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Description:
This is a new version of a track I uploaded earlier. I am happier with the end vocals, so I am allowing downloading of this one. Thanks to everybody who commented before for their suggestions. I tried to incorporate most of them.
Most notably, I raised the vocal level and eq'd them a bit differently. I also 'made room' for them with some subtractive eq'ing on the main guitar. The vocal reverb/delay is a little more subdued now too. I hope you like it!
Lyrics:
My Time Machine
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Don't wake me. Just let me be.
Bad things, wait for me.
Sometimes it's the only way.
But my worst fears caught up today.
Your smile... Your face is brave.
Sine waves, they illuminate.
But now it seems - the smell is cold.
The doctors buzz... don't leave me alone.
Please don't go. At least wait for me.
There's so much, you have left to see.
Don't wait for God, to decide you fate.
Fight back, with all your might.
Don't let up, 'till you're back at home
and you find yourself sitting next to me.
If I had the means
To build a time machine
I would find a way
And I would change this day.
Hardware:
Fender guitars and bass, v-drums
Software:
Cubase 4
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Yep &mdash 07/01/08 - 11:22:30 AM
Still sounding great :D and very impressive now I can download and be jealous... LOL
Moses [ Reply to This ]
jealous? &mdash 07/01/08 - 12:18:09 PM
you? jealous of me? you have no reason to be, from the songs of yours that i've heard.
thanks for checking out the new version! [ Reply to This ]
Nice &mdash 07/01/08 - 11:25:50 AM
I didn't catch the other version, but that's ok.
This one is very nice. Dreaming... [ Reply to This ]
thank you &mdash 07/01/08 - 12:22:34 PM
thanks. if i had my way, this would have been the version i uploaded in the first place, so it works out perfectly this way.
actually, i'm not sure a lot of people will even notice the difference. but i do. :) thanks for checking it out. [ Reply to This ]
Killer! &mdash 07/01/08 - 11:33:57 AM
Great work my friend, fine guitars sound and well placed and mixed. The ending was also very cool but was just wishing the vocals would be a little bit louder in the last part but everything is just great and an amazing track. Thanks for sharing, really a radio ready!
Take Care
- Yeman A. Al-Rawi [ Reply to This ]
end vox &mdash 07/01/08 - 12:27:47 PM
hehe. i figured people might think the vocals are still too quiet at the end. i just did a quick little A/B test and there really isn't that much difference between this and the last. the end vocals just weren't sitting right with me at any volume louder than this. it is probably just me being shy still... something i will have to keep working on, i guess.
thanks for checking out the new version(s), yeman! [ Reply to This ]
This is really superb &mdash 07/01/08 - 12:32:21 PM
cheers! &mdash 07/01/08 - 05:03:00 PM
i'm happy so many people are digging this enough to download it. i hope it sounds good on a big stereo, in case any of you going through an air port or burning to cd. (i usually do a car test when mastering other peoples' stuff, but am rather neglectful when it comes to my own.) [ Reply to This ]
Time Machine &mdash 07/01/08 - 12:38:58 PM
This sounds awesome. Great job on the tweaking. Definitely a download - thanks! [ Reply to This ]
tweaks &mdash 07/01/08 - 05:05:27 PM
thanks for the kind words. glad people approve of the tweaks. although i probably still didn't push the vocals up as much as people wanted. [ Reply to This ]
This &mdash 07/01/08 - 01:30:28 PM
is great! Love the vocals and the guitars!
Really well produced and a great sound!
Great ending and I loved it all!
Thanks! [ Reply to This ]
thanks! &mdash 07/01/08 - 05:11:29 PM
thanks for the kind words, bob. glad you like the ending too. vocally, that is the part i am most unsure about. i appreciate the support! [ Reply to This ]
My Time Machine &mdash 07/01/08 - 04:45:55 PM
awee it sounds wonderful Wow!!
Really beautiful singing as well.
Thank you for sharing your little gem.
And thanks for the great download.
Peace Dee. [ Reply to This ]
no, thank YOU! &mdash 07/01/08 - 05:13:41 PM
hey, thank you for downloading it! glad you enjoyed it. that means a lot. [ Reply to This ]
awesome song &mdash 07/01/08 - 05:24:07 PM
I really enjoyed this quite a bit. You sing very well and you did a wonderful performance throughout this emotional sad song. Really Great song. Kudos!!
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thank you! &mdash 07/01/08 - 05:34:35 PM
thanks, gail. the lyrics came after the music. they just seemed to fit. it was easy to maintain my composure while tracking them, as i was wholly focused on not singing poorly. :) [ Reply to This ]
Outstanding! &mdash 07/01/08 - 06:52:19 PM
thanks &mdash 07/01/08 - 09:45:24 PM
excellent &mdash 07/02/08 - 08:50:23 AM
delicate and totally immersive. I can swim in your luxurious vocal. The instrumental bed sounds fabulous. Master mix job. [ Reply to This ]
luxurious &mdash 07/02/08 - 12:53:56 PM
thank you very much for your kind words. i guess i won't give up singing after all. :) [ Reply to This ]
Yep, That's Life... &mdash 07/02/08 - 12:35:35 PM
Get it while it's hot.
Very nicely done, displaying a sensitivity for dynamics and dramatic impact. ;)
--- Joe [ Reply to This ]
dynamics &mdash 07/02/08 - 12:57:35 PM
thanks, joe! despite my contemporary approach to mixing (slamming everything) i still like to preserve dynamics for added impact. even if it means i have to automate a bunch of fader moves. thanks for checking out this new version! [ Reply to This ]
Exceptional &mdash 07/02/08 - 03:25:25 PM
simply an excellent song, beautifully arranged and performed.
A little of Nick Drake and John Martyn.
No bad thing.
Cheers
Dick [ Reply to This ]
thanks &mdash 07/02/08 - 10:29:54 PM
thanks for listening! i just checked out Nick Drake and John Martyn on the intarnets. i'm certainly flattered to be mentioned in the same breath as those two. cheers! [ Reply to This ]
Hey &mdash 07/02/08 - 04:20:59 PM
hey &mdash 07/02/08 - 10:33:57 PM
This is stunning..... &mdash 07/02/08 - 11:37:20 PM
I was wondering why it has straight 10's across the board, and now I know why. This is amongst the best songs I have heard on this site. I only wish I could produce something as beautiful as this one day. This should be getting radio play. OUTSTANDING!!! [ Reply to This ]
thanks &mdash 07/04/08 - 04:06:11 PM
thanks for checking this out, guy! i'm pretty happy with my studio setup right now, so i can usually get pretty close to the what i was envisioning when i mix. i'm actually trying to make this my business, doing foley and walla for tv/cartoons, and mixing and mastering bands. sure, everybody's got the means to do it themselves these days, but i can usually take it a step further. [ Reply to This ]
completely knocked out &mdash 07/03/08 - 04:59:52 AM
the writing is so perfect.. a wonderful blend of etherial mood, lyric, melody, performance the vocal is heartbreaking... really a top notch song....
what a song.... !!!!!! [ Reply to This ]
knocked out &mdash 07/04/08 - 04:10:05 PM
sorry about knocking you out. i will be sure to make smelling salts available with the download next time. thanks for listening! [ Reply to This ]
D &mdash 07/04/08 - 04:02:40 PM
It's a wonderfull song .
I hear a low D (sustained) nearly all along the track that is a bit too present . [ Reply to This ]
Db &mdash 07/04/08 - 04:14:47 PM
yeah, this is in drop tuning and that low string has a tendency to drone on. it's intended that way, but maybe it is a bit much. i'll have to take a careful listen now. thanks for the comment! [ Reply to This ]
Question &mdash 07/04/08 - 04:20:57 PM
I should have wrotte this as a question .
It's a just a impression I have about this note . [ Reply to This ]
OK .... &mdash 07/05/08 - 02:43:51 AM
.. I spoke too soon in the coffee house version .. causwe I thought it was so good .. and so few listens .... but I see that you are getting OUT THERE on MacJams ... good !!! Your mixing skills sound solid to me ! I wish I had the patience and the youth to have the perserverence to mix my own stuff this way ... and sing it out the same way too ! Solid gear ! You might just be well on your way ! [ Reply to This ]
thanks &mdash 07/05/08 - 08:35:41 PM
i'm trying to do the sound thing for a living, but it's a slow go... and funds are running low. i am mostly doing sound for cartoons and video games right now, which is a lot of fun. anyway, years of recording with my band, and my current business activities, have allowed me to get where i'm at when it comes to mixing and mastering. you are correct, it does take a lot of time and patience. thanks for checking my stuff out! [ Reply to This ]
whoaah.... &mdash 07/05/08 - 06:48:56 AM
Man, I love this.
I really do.
The instrumental bed is gorgeous. I really love how you manage to have so many different things going on, creating a wee sense of chaos, yet managing to not making it sound cluttered.
And that final 'breakout' in the end - yum, yum, delicious! (Like I mentioned in my comment on "Leave" I love dynamic contrast.)
I've recently decided against 'sunshine pumping' in comments, but I can't really follow that rule here since this deserves almost every bit of praise available in the MJers vocabulary.
One of the better songs I've heard here, in my opinion.
Your new fan,
-Einar S. [ Reply to This ]
wow! &mdash 07/05/08 - 08:40:24 PM
thank you very much for your words of encouragement! i knew this was a sweet/somber riff when i originally came up with it, so i went in that direction. and added the big ending because, well i'm a fan of that sort of thing. great example of this effect (way better than mine) is february stars by the foo fighters. killer tune. check it out if you haven't heard it.
thanks again! [ Reply to This ]
oooOOOooo! &mdash 07/05/08 - 08:43:58 PM
i just thought of another fine example of that big build. mj's own rsorensen's 'in my head again'. a little more poppy angle, but right up there with 'february stars' as one of my all time favourite tunes... ever!
http://www.macjams.com/song/40175 [ Reply to This ]
Another nice tune... &mdash 07/05/08 - 10:12:53 AM
thanks! &mdash 07/05/08 - 08:46:36 PM
thank you, mr dolby. right back atcha! in fact, i dig your brother's work too... y'know your brother thomas? his hit 'blinded me with science'? (i'm having way too much fun with your name. sorry. i'll stop. maybe.) [ Reply to This ]
Even better! &mdash 07/06/08 - 03:24:53 AM
This production is even better than the original. A really classy tune 12 - no nits to pick. Excellent stuff!
Neil [ Reply to This ]
cool, thanks! &mdash 07/06/08 - 12:53:05 PM
i'm glad there was a discernible difference between this and the last version. thanks for checking it out! [ Reply to This ]
Stunning tune. &mdash 07/06/08 - 08:51:18 AM
This is really nice. The singing is great, especially in the first few verses.
Thanks for sharing. [ Reply to This ]
set phasers to stun! &mdash 07/06/08 - 12:56:10 PM
i really appreciate the comment, thank you! i'm glad you liked it. cheers! [ Reply to This ]
this is &mdash 07/07/08 - 07:10:19 AM
by far my new favorite song here on macjams. I saw it in the rating pics so thought i'd give it a listen and i'm so happy i did. The acoustic guitar sounds soooo rich and full, it really sounds professionally recorded. As soon as i get my ipod and itunes fixed i'm downloading this. You commented a song of mine not long ago and i was really happy you mentioned a coldplay-esque sound, and i know it probably seems like i'm just mirroring your comment but with the great crescendo at the end of this song it reminds me of alot of there work (songs like fix you and amsterdam). I swear this isn't just me being polite because you commented me - i genuinely love this song
thanks
Mckenzie [ Reply to This ]
cheers! &mdash 07/07/08 - 11:21:12 AM
thanks, mckenzie! you are too kind. those are very cool songs you are comparing mine too. although coldplay is not my absolute, #1 favourite band, the last half of politik has the coolest progression i've ever heard. i love it! but i digress. thanks again! [ Reply to This ]
I was listening to this &mdash 07/07/08 - 09:33:09 PM
last night and was very well blown away. So, I figured I needed to play this for the guys in my art department before a comment. A big 4 thumbs up from the crew. see ya get four in here. [ Reply to This ]
oops &mdash 07/07/08 - 09:35:29 PM
wow &mdash 07/09/08 - 02:35:01 AM
thanks vic! always good to get more opinions and 'virtual' favs! glad everyone enjoyed listening... even non-MJers. cheers! [ Reply to This ]
:D &mdash 07/07/08 - 10:31:20 PM
:) &mdash 07/09/08 - 02:23:06 AM
thanks for sending happy thoughts my way. i appreciate you stopping by! [ Reply to This ]
outro &mdash 07/07/08 - 10:48:19 PM
ending. &mdash 07/09/08 - 02:28:54 AM
thanks again, rs! glad you like it. i definitely like the new ending vocal take better. [ Reply to This ]
Time Machine &mdash 07/08/08 - 11:42:55 PM
This sounds great. You definitely have what it takes. I liked the mellow feel throughout and the kick at the end made it all complete.
Well done man! [ Reply to This ]
final kick. &mdash 07/09/08 - 02:41:11 AM
thanks for the comment, nick. i'm glad you enjoyed it and the final push at the end. it was fun to record it and it has been a great experience sharing it here on macjams! [ Reply to This ]
vox just beautiful &mdash 07/09/08 - 11:20:41 AM
another top song. Simply brilliant, that soothing melody is addictive. You have the Skills to write great tunes. [ Reply to This ]
vox &mdash 07/09/08 - 12:50:34 PM
thanks for your kind words. yep, sometimes even i get lucky with melodies. thanks for the comment! [ Reply to This ]
WOW!!! &mdash 07/11/08 - 01:05:04 AM
another amazing tune man! i am amazed, truly...this is amazing stuff! i can't see how you question your newer material at all.....this is right up there with some of the very BEST on this site in my eyes! i mean HOLY FRIGGIN CRAP MAN! this is truly EXCELLENT!!!
age [ Reply to This ]
wow... &mdash 07/11/08 - 03:30:37 AM
thanks for the kind words, again, age! i'm glad you enjoyed it, as i really enjoyed writing/recording it. cheers! [ Reply to This ]
Amazing &mdash 07/27/08 - 08:30:15 AM
This tune is great!!! I love it when the band kicks in. It surprised the hell out of me. I love that. Your mix is perfect. Also, love your vocals. Thanks [ Reply to This ]
thanks! &mdash 07/28/08 - 07:06:37 PM
thanks for the remark, mr remark. and your comment was posted on my birthday. the perfect gift! cheers! [ Reply to This ]
Finally! &mdash 08/02/08 - 06:18:19 PM
Thanks for giving us a killer downloadable tune. My favorite moment is just before the 3 minute marker when everyone holds up their lighters. At that moment, you have this thickening of strumming, ringing sounds that build up dense and almost messy..... then they all ring out and BOOM! You have happy pyrotechnicians high five-ing each other in slow motion.
With five extra arms, I can give you more thumbs up than Vic and his art dept, but I'll keep thumbs down so somebody doesn't lose an eye (again).
Rock on dude! [ Reply to This ]
high-five! &mdash 08/05/08 - 11:43:02 PM
thanks for the comment! such vivid imagery. and, on behalf of everyone, thank you for minding your thumbs this time. (it's all fun and games until...) [ Reply to This ]
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