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Blood Still Running


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tf10music

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Written and recorded fairly quickly. I have tons of songs in the works, but this one felt right, so I just went with it. I had fun with the harmonies, and pushing my voice towards its upper limit. I hope you all enjoy!
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Lyrics
Ink in a mirror: save me,
Loll out black while your blood’s still running, now

Scraps of the clay that made me
Stuck to my fingers, though my blood’s still running, now

The rasp of earth won’t wake me,
It will wheeze like a sickness though its blood’s still running, now.

And you, you will not take me
While my blood still runs, and my blood’s still running, now.

The sidewalks line a river of city light,
And my blood still runs, and my blood’s still running now.

Send your voices down,
To the ground, and they’ll stain
The gnarled walls of my veins, and I’ll smile

Burn this silence down
To the ground, and lay rest
To the din in your chest, and I miss you, my friend

Though your blood is still running now…

Autumn in the ochre city
Where leaves are rust as if their blood’s still running now.

Blessed into bombast and pity that
Dents like sin, and the rouge is running now.

Withered as the breath that named me,
Drawn through my hair, and your laughter’s stunning now.

And you, you will not take me
While my blood still runs, and my blood’s still running, now.




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Uploaded: Oct 25, 2010 - 05:47:10 PM
Last Updated: Oct 25, 2010 - 06:21:12 PM Last Played: Jan 29, 2017 - 01:55:12 PM
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hackneybloke said 2436 days ago (October 25th, 2010)
blood still running
dude - you are developing into a VERY interesting talent. this is an exceptional creation (except the harmonies...which suck...but just need tightening). the second part is also very interesting....but needs a better 'in'...the transition is sudden. your vocal delivery is really improving....and wait...for the first time i wanted to download one of your tracks...and there's no download button. why no download?
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tf10music said 2436 days ago (October 25th, 2010)
'no download'
that can be remedied. Thanks for the comments. And damn...I as actually kind of proud of those harmonies. I'll be trying those again for sure, thanks for the feedback. The second part was totally a throwaway, I'm not gonna lie...I had no other ideas, so I just took the chord forms of the riff I was playing and played around with them a little bit. I had no ideas for a transition, but if anybody does, that would be totally awesome.

Thanks for the support!
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michaeljayklein said 2436 days ago (October 25th, 2010)
Listen to Julian...
..he speaketh the truth with the utmost veracity. There is a very Dylan-ish flavor to this song (good marks in the composition and lyric department--you are an extremely articulate artist and I readily can see where having that gift makes your verse outstanding). You have a fine voice and your loose, rambling style works easily on this; I do think a little more concentration in your diction--not dotting all the i's mind you--but just a bit more attention in that line would add a shade of improvement (just my opinion and hope you don't mind the feedback!) Keep up the fine work and take care now, Michael
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tf10music said 2436 days ago (October 25th, 2010)
Thanks!
I will indeed heed Julian. Also, I hear you about the diction, I actually noticed that I was slurring my words a little bit (that's what you mean by 'diction,' in this case, am I right? You seemed not to be referring to actual word choice, so I made that assumption...). I actually tried to re-sing some lines, but they either emerged out of tune or equally slurred, don't ask me why. Something to work on, undoubtedly. Thanks for the feedback, sir!
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scaustrita said 2436 days ago (October 25th, 2010)
Nice!
I enjoyed your playing and writing.
The vocals fit the music flawlessly.

:: Entertaining ::
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tf10music said 2436 days ago (October 25th, 2010)
thanks
thanks for the comment, and for stopping by!
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crissew said 2436 days ago (October 25th, 2010)
I think the Dylan
references are very good. Very well written lyrics over a folk sound bed. The harp sounds great in here and compliments the simple guitar part very well. Vocals are better here than I have heard from you. Backups would probably sound better in a lower register. They could be tightened up a bit too; they are a bit out of sync with the lead vocal. The high harmony sounds a bit strained too I think. It helps me to focus on staying relaxed in the jaw when I sing high, maybe it will help you too.

You are showing great improvement and your songs have a character to them, in part due to your lyrics and also the quirky delivery. Keep those aspects, and polish the rest a bit and the sky is the limit for you my friend.
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crissew said 2436 days ago (October 25th, 2010)
erm
I mean when I sing in a high register, not "high", lol
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tf10music said 2436 days ago (October 25th, 2010)
loosen
the jaw. Good advice, I'll try that. Out of curiosity, what do you mean by tightening up the harmonies? Is it a matter of timing? Thanks so much for your support, it means a lot.
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lank81 said 2436 days ago (October 25th, 2010)
Lots of similarities
In the vocal delivery. I've heard a few singers in which you delivery reminded me of. Some very understandable and maybe others not. Dylan, Yorke, and Cobain. Yea, I know the last one isn't a total clinch but it's like a mix of CoDylan or something, yea. Anyways, dug the lyrics and the guitar but I'd say the harmonies need some work. I'm not huge on harmonies but my wife can nail them. Polish that up and I think you'll have an all around gerat song.
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tf10music said 2436 days ago (October 25th, 2010)
wow
I really like all of those comparisons. Very flattering. Thanks for the critique of the harmonies, I will indeed work on them. Thanks for the feedback!

cheers
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jiguma said 2436 days ago (October 26th, 2010)
You do great lyrics
This is rough as bags in some ways, but is recorded honestly and with feeling. I read someone call you "Dylan" in another post, and I can see where they're coming from. As you build up your skills in production and writing, I'm guessing that you'll end up with a foot solidly in the door of music-making. I think the roughness of your recordings is a positive in these days of over-production of everything.
Keep em coming!
Neil
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tf10music said 2436 days ago (October 26th, 2010)
thanks!
I'm flattered that you think there is a conceivable chance that I might become good at this music thang. In some recordings, though not in this one, I strive for that roughness, and I'm glad you appreciate it. I've got a great deal to learn, and am eager to learn it. Thanks for stopping by!

Cheers
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ted23 said 2436 days ago (October 26th, 2010)
yeah
your developing on every tune man.
Big fan of your lyrics and delivery.
Always interesting and fresh music.
tf10music said 2436 days ago (October 26th, 2010)
thanks!
Glad to here that I am constantly improving. That's really great to hear. Thanks for stopping by, man!
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Sir Bass said 2436 days ago (October 26th, 2010)
Cool
GReat lyrics. Blood.
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tf10music said 2436 days ago (October 26th, 2010)
glad
you enjoyed. Thanks for the listen!
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dave_b said 2436 days ago (October 26th, 2010)
Blood Still Running
Some nice images in the lyric ("Ink in a mirror", "line a river of city light"). Vocal phrasing is working a lot better then in your earlier posts.
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tf10music said 2436 days ago (October 26th, 2010)
very
glad to hear I'm making progress in that, and your feedback has been invaluable. I'm also glad you dug the lyrics. Thanks for taking the time!
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Loob said 2436 days ago (October 26th, 2010)
Great lyrics
And the style is good. Some pitch problems, but not glaring. Yes timing on the harmonies. Nice framework Ben.
tf10music said 2436 days ago (October 26th, 2010)
pitch problems
I shall be looking into them. Glad you enjoyed the lyrics, and thanks so much for the feedback!

Cheers
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egobandit said 2435 days ago (October 26th, 2010)
Man
This is like hanging out in the park with a guitar and just playing while a friend sung, down to the ground! The switch close to the end was classic Raw I dig it!
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tf10music said 2435 days ago (October 26th, 2010)
wow
I'm really glad you enjoyed it! And isn't that what we all like the most about music? Being able to play it in the playground, or anyplace, really? I know that's the kind of feel I strive for, so I'm glad you heard it in there. Thanks for stopping by!
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Vic Holman said 2434 days ago (October 27th, 2010)
running
a quick one. sometimes that works. what you have here is a really good song at it's core. i think when you gain the recording and production skills (i started off pretty rough myself, so it's doable) this would be a really good one to revisit
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tf10music said 2434 days ago (October 28th, 2010)
thanks
for the support! I am definitely going to continue tweaking this. Glad you think it has potential.

Cheers!
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SmokeyVW said 2434 days ago (October 27th, 2010)
you will not take me
yeah. i agree.

thanks
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tf10music said 2434 days ago (October 28th, 2010)
haha
so i would imagine. Thanks for stopping by!
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shavingronaldscar said 2433 days ago (October 29th, 2010)
sweet!
I love the 4/4-9/8 signature switch. Really cool voice. Personally I like the harmonies. With the right post-prod they could sound really sweet! Keep it up, you've got an original style.
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tf10music said 2429 days ago (November 2nd, 2010)
wow!
Glad the harmonies worked for you. And the change in time. Thanks for the feedback!
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VicDiesel said 2431 days ago (October 30th, 2010)
Hm.
I thought I posted a comment here earlier.

Anyway, I like how this song slowly builds up. Handclaps are not my favourite percussions sounds, but here it works in context.

Good stuff.
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tf10music said 2429 days ago (November 2nd, 2010)
hah
you DID comment on THAT song...this is a different one. Glad to see that you've got it on the mind haha.

Cheers, sir!
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I haven't been playing music for too long. I've dabbled with the guitar for years, but it was only late in 2009 when I started writing my own stuff, and I've loved it ever since. I had always been inventing riffs or short melodies on the guitar, but ... [see more]

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