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Somethings wrong with you 2


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apb

 Genre: Pop (mainstream)

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Part of my continued quest to make a waveform the shape of something erotic ..
or my personal 02:08s challenge.. actually .. it's none of the above, it's just I had some time to re-visit this post and add some vocals, electric guitar and re-mix it a bit. Hope it wasn't too soon or fresh in your minds.

Enjoy.
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Lyrics
Can I help you?
Somethings wrong with you...

Picking up your piece of mind,
Your up & down, lost & found,
Scared of what you might find..
Or hear has been goin' round.

That there's something really wrong with you
Your empty eyes don't see the things around you.

Your can't recollect that much,
A sweet caress, a precious touch of...

Something really wrong with you,
Your out but you are in..
..the wrong mood.

Perhaps you could use some help,
To make or break your will to smother love,
Smother love.

That there's something really wrong with you
Your empty eyes can't hide things around you.
You are out but you are in
The wrong mood,
There's things that you just can't win.....

Can I help you?
Song Stats
Hits: 2724
Comments: 50
Fans: 22
Plays: 252
Downloads: 47

Uploaded: Jul 04, 2011 - 12:24:27 PM
Last Updated: Jul 05, 2011 - 08:41:37 AM Last Played: Nov 13, 2015 - 07:30:14 PM
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Hardware:
Roland TD-9
Yamaha APX-8A acoustic
Fender bass
Gibson Les Paul Studio (EMG ZW pick-ups)
Rode NT1-A (+ pop-shield)
Kawai K1 (mother keyboard)
Mac mini 1.66Ghz, 2 GB RAM
MOTU Traveler
Software:
GB v3
JP 4
Ampeg SVX
MDA Combo
Ozone 3
Comments
alackbass said 2210 days ago (July 4th, 2011)
Somethings wrong with you 2
Damn this is a good song! I doubt you'll mind if I download a copy for my iPod. So I did!
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apb said 2210 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
Thanks very much Andrew
I hope it sounds even better in buds. Flattered (as usual) with any downloads.
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craft said 2210 days ago (July 4th, 2011)
Can I help you?
Yes, you can.. In other words you did.. Cos you did uploaded a great song to listen to.
Vocals and guitars added a lot to the song. Now it is finished...:) Great work Alan
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apb said 2210 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
Wish
I had more time to help you with guitars, but what with learning drums and less time for music over the summer (house renovations part3) it's a pipe-dream. Thanks Antonio- the guitars are typical "pop" in that I don't "play" anything complicated at all...it's all in getting the sound of them "just right"... to which end I found a little used MDA plug-in called "Combo" that I liked after tweaking it some..
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TreeFalls said 2210 days ago (July 4th, 2011)
ha!
love the picture! this song came together really nicely with the vox. lyrics are great and harmonies knock this out of the park. the bass line is so infectious. really nice job; immediate download.
apb said 2210 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
Thanks Steve
Appreciate the return and download very much: glad I didn't disappoint when adding el. guitar, vocals to this and remixing it a bit.
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PeterB7858 said 2210 days ago (July 4th, 2011)
Pop personified
Hi Alan. The clarity of the mix was the first thing that hit me. The guitars sit so nicely in the sound bed and your vocal work is pop personified. Short and sweet. Enjoyed. Regards, Peter.
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apb said 2210 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
Cheers Peter
I seem to manage to get pretty clear mixes and Ozone is a great mastering plug-in. As for the guitars: as the el.guitar came in I had to move the acoustic from C to L (rather wide: -54) and balanced it off with the el. guitar R +54 .. something I've heard in other "pop" mixes working pretty well. On the vocals: it would be nice if I cut away a "that" and sung "or" instead of "your" ie. the lyrics (d'oh)... I also hear now some ascending "aah's" and "la la la" backing bits might work in this.
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gadzooks said 2210 days ago (July 4th, 2011)
Somethings wrong with you 2
This is good song writing. Enjoy your harmonies. Cool bass line and your added guitar all work well in the mix. Good stuff!
SG
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apb said 2210 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
Thanks Stan

Did all the addition work in 3 hrs... so it's still rough around the edges to my ears... but definitely more complete now (which I am glad for).
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gator4040 said 2210 days ago (July 4th, 2011)
wrong with..
very well crafted song and cool mix. super pop!
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apb said 2210 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
Thanks gator4040

Glad you enjoyed this venture into drumming and more commercial pop.
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magnatone said 2210 days ago (July 4th, 2011)
Something's Wrong
this is terrific work alan!! clearly there's nothing wrong with YOU! :)
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apb said 2210 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
Thanks Karen
I prefer "clearly flawed but proud of it" lol ;o)
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ktb said 2210 days ago (July 4th, 2011)
Somethings wrong with you 2
I love the combination of strong lyrics with the fun pop vibe you've created. Your vocal sounded spot on. Awesome job mixing all the cool guitars and keys keeping it humming along. Perfect picture :-)
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apb said 2210 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
"OG!" Thanks John ;o)
I had test ran some vocals lines in the synths in previous version, if only to check how I felt with this C# key (unusual for me)- seemed ok, stretched me a bit on the harmonies but forced out some drive... they need a bit of correction but the main lines weren't bad at all (if I say so myself)
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KCsGROOVE said 2210 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
excellent songwriting!
I like everything about this song
first of all the bass! cool notes and tone
vocals and harmonies are spot on
Fav and download!
Thanks for sharing!
KC
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apb said 2210 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
Thanks KC
As long as it's catchy and memorable I'm happy. Spot on? I think I fluffed the first "something" in the 1st chorus (better in 2nd).. I did this quickly and would normally have moved the whole the thing into Logic and treated the vocals alot more- this is pretty raw vocal wise... but enough to "finish" this idea off. Glad you enjoyed it and downloaded it. Pleasure to be in your iPod.
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mowguy3 said 2210 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
Nice
Great track and sound. Harmonies and guitar fit well. Enjoyed....
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apb said 2210 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
Thanks Russ

Was real fun trying to do the drums and trying to do something more "modern pop"... and by that I'm perhaps hitting around mid 90s, early 2000s ..
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davisamerica said 2210 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
Darn Alan!!
... GREAT mix and production here. Funny thing was actually fixing to comment when I saw you on line. Brilliant tune and the vocals and backing are great. Just hit download so am taking a 3rd listen as I type...yep it's that good. No nits... lots of grins. Excellent re-mix.
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apb said 2210 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
Thanks Jack!
.. didn't need to cajole you with a note even ;o) Lots of grins here too :oD I have nits ..not in my hair.. arsch u know what I mean ..
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musichead said 2210 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
been awhile..
Its been awhile since Ive seen ya holmes!.
Love the new tune get job as always!! Bass even sounds real good...hahaha! A++++++
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apb said 2210 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
Finally!
I got the bass to your satisfaction bud ;o)- might be because I started with drums and worked up .. hmm .. would have thought that would have led more to losing them .. but since I played the drums in this, perhaps I needed to hear the bass more. Thanks for dropping in Steve, always a pleasure.
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SISTERS said 2210 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
DANG YO!
cool intro got me in the mood.
WOW - i love the way you sing this!!
perfect touches of harmony and your melody is delicious.
I like that there's only one piece of mind. 8)
and the music drives right down the highway.
Alan - really fine to hear you sing. this is a gem of a perky tune!
Anne

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apb said 2210 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
You had me at "Dang Yo" ;o)
Thanks Anne- I only have one piece of mind left.. and I'm hanging on to it! lol... must add "perky" to the keywords in your honor...
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867-5309 said 2210 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
mood
big full production piece -
:55 through 1:01 parallel fifth harmony - I really like.. . and how it reappears . . .
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apb said 2210 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
Thanks Scott
ah the old parallel 5th harmony trick.. hehe (what is he talking about??) ;o) Actually I like that bit too .. the "oo" that glided it's way upwards was one of my better improvs in my haphazard backing vocal takes.
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Bob Rodgers said 2209 days ago (July 5th, 2011)
A
great production Alan, so clear and I love the bass, great sound and playing. I like the drums and the guitars sound nice in the mix, it's good to hear this song again with vocals and harmonies.
Very polished performance and very much enjoyed.

Bob
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apb said 2209 days ago (July 6th, 2011)
Thanks Bob
for the return listen and comment. Glad the vocals didn't ruin the bed, even with some squiffy bits.
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ted23 said 2209 days ago (July 6th, 2011)
Apb
Excellento!
Everything is spot on man. Very strong song in all departments.
I really dig your instrument and noise decisions :)
Most definitely COOL!
D/L thanks
apb said 2209 days ago (July 6th, 2011)
Thanks Ed
my self diagnosis would be:
a) correct the "to make OR break" line
b) correct some of the chorus' "something" pitch
c) remove a "that there's" prior to last chorus (doesn't scan)
d) the lead bass bit is actually played wrong (on 2nd take) compared to what it should be (1st take)
e) Re-record the acoustic with my mic (no DIed as is herein)
f) the el. guitar is well sloppy- but was going for feel (not sure I could even play it the same again)

So, some things to consider sorting .. I might fix these annoyances while making a video version...time permitting.. never done that .. would be fun!
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Moviz said 2209 days ago (July 6th, 2011)
Well
I got here via your page Alan, so that worked out fine.... I think your vocals are a great addition to this song.... turns out like the vocals are the steady rock around which the backing dances and weaves nicely.... that bass is great too..... great recording and arrangement, regards M
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apb said 2209 days ago (July 6th, 2011)
Glad you made it Maurice
and glad you still enjoyed this with the added vocals on top. I have a few of my own nits .. but don't we all?
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neilh79 said 2209 days ago (July 6th, 2011)
Somethings Wrong with You
Sounds good to me with the vox! Sung really well, I like it as both an instrumental and a song, great stuff!
apb said 2209 days ago (July 6th, 2011)
Cheers Neil
since there's two versions: I wonder if you prefer it with or without vocals? I must admit my previous version was an intermediate bed, never thought of leaving it as an instrumental until you mentioned it.
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neilh79 said 2209 days ago (July 6th, 2011)
Honestly
Probably without vocals for me but maybe that is just because I heard the instrumental version first, how i would have felt if you had released this first and then taken the vocal out I dont know!!!
jiguma said 2208 days ago (July 7th, 2011)
Late as usual!
Just listened to the earlier version - the lyrics really work here. Excellent playing, writing, singing, production and snippet selection.
This is just a very good post - can't even find a nit - I must be slipping!
Cheers from Oz - hope you're enjoying summer!
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apb said 2208 days ago (July 7th, 2011)
Was loads of fun
to play the drums in this. For my own nits see my a)-f) reply to Ed (ted23). Perhaps I should try stretching it to 3mins.. another verse and a solo would probably do it. Hmm... and happy birthday bud!!!
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Philip18 said 2208 days ago (July 7th, 2011)
Nothing wrong!
Great music - love the words, love the vocal but the tight backing is a highlight for me. Quality playing here. The way you interspersed the Can I help you is an interesting device too. Much enjoyed!
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apb said 2206 days ago (July 8th, 2011)
thanks Philip
First time studio recording attempt on the drums for me, was tricky playing to a click,, so I appreciate that effort wasn't wasted. Cheers.
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egobandit said 2206 days ago (July 8th, 2011)
recollect as much
This revolves, the guitar muting is awesome!the electronic background is like some computer control board flashing greatness Downloaded!
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apb said 2206 days ago (July 9th, 2011)
Cheers Tim
My first "all played by me" choon. Playing drums is great fun..recording them to a click is more frustrating fun... glad you stopped in for a listen and enjoyed this more commercial piece.
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tempie said 2204 days ago (July 11th, 2011)
piece of mind
man i always enjoy your pop sensibility and those 80's new wave influences. especially like the rhythm guitar, understated but driving along and most of all really stylish, very slick. happily downloaded, thanks!
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apb said 2204 days ago (July 11th, 2011)
Thanks very much Craig
Glad to be in your iPod as always. I wonder which 80s new wave influences you hear? (would be good for reference, I don't mind).
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stevel said 2182 days ago (August 1st, 2011)
I like it
Nice groovin tune....bouncy rhythms...powerpoptastic! Got a bit of a New Pornographers feel to it
Good production as ever
Cheers
Steve
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apb said 2144 days ago (September 9th, 2011)
Thanks Steve
..and thanks for the kind words and flattering comparison: hard for me to focus on one common sound, I fear the reaction I promote is "who is Alan going to sound like this month?" lol.
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rockstar89 said 2139 days ago (September 13th, 2011)
VERY COOL
VERY COOL. Kind of an 80's vibe, great recording!
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apb said 2135 days ago (September 17th, 2011)
Thanks very much
I seem to just about manage some different genres, in various decades ...thanks for the listen, comment: always nice to get new listeners too.
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Estella said 2090 days ago (November 2nd, 2011)
Go!
Great vocals, APB! Great to hear you again.
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