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if i could write a love song


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urbnite

 Genre: Lo-fi

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first demo i've recorded in a long time. just a song about not quite being in love i guess.

i'm (as usual) not really happy with the vocals. don't like listening to my voice, i guess. didn't bother putting much effort into mixing.
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Lyrics
if i could write a love song
it'd be about you
if you'd like you could sing along
if you wanted to
cause i might need help singing a song that's all about you

if i could right what i've done wrong
that's what i'd do
but it'll be there all along
haunting you
i wanna take it all back and make it all better for you

maybe i should move along
onto something new
start again without the friend
that i had in you
or maybe i should just make my way home back to you
Song Stats
Hits: 2012
Comments: 23
Fans: 12
Plays: 54
Downloads: 0
Votes: 1
Uploaded: Jul 10, 2011 - 09:18:56 PM
Last Updated: Jul 10, 2011 - 09:23:47 PM Last Played: Sep 04, 2017 - 09:27:47 AM
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Hardware:
Zoom H4 Handy Recorder
MacBook Pro
Seagull Acoustic Guitar
Fender Champion 600
Software:
Garageband
Comments
johnwhitehead said 2264 days ago (July 10th, 2011)
Love song
Really enjoy your writing, singing and stripped down style. Might be improved if second guitar was more in right channel.
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urbnite said 2264 days ago (July 10th, 2011)
3rd time?
i keep trying to reply to this and it's not showing up. maybe all 3 will come at once!

anyway, thanks john! do you mean the lead bit? that's actually 2 guitars panned to either side, maybe i did them a bit unevenly. will check that. thanks for the kind words and input!
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drakonis said 2264 days ago (July 10th, 2011)
nice nice piece of music
Love the pace, love the bonk-bink bass plucking rhythm and overall song, and you know, I think your voice is just fine... and I can't stand my singing voice either, but at least YOU can sing! :-) Good to hear you back and swaggering!
ttfn,
Drakonis
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urbnite said 2264 days ago (July 10th, 2011)
untitled.
i don't know why macjams is eating my comments! maybe it's because i wasn't titling them.

anyway, i was saying thank you drak. it's good to see there are still familiar (and friendly!) faces around here!
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papag said 2264 days ago (July 10th, 2011)
just about the way
you sing this well, I really like the whole treatment.

would if I coulda...downloaded :(
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urbnite said 2264 days ago (July 10th, 2011)
sorry no download... :(
thanks papag! i guess i can't change that download thing now can i? i figured i might tweak the mix or something. maybe i'll put up a tweaked version for downloading.
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PBGB said 2264 days ago (July 10th, 2011)
I like the pace of this a lot
here Darren. Laid back and thoughtful. Very classy!
I'm enjoying the simple instrumentation and your voice is sounding really good these days. I don't think any more effort was required with the mix - it sounds very well done to me.
Cheers from Oz,
Neil

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urbnite said 2264 days ago (July 10th, 2011)
hey neil!
thanks a bunch. i'm singing lower than i used to. i blame the cigarettes. caroline told me to quit and i just wouldn't listen! :)
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KCsGROOVE said 2264 days ago (July 10th, 2011)
fine songwriting
Cool playing and singing!
Very nice song!
Enjoyed!
KC
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urbnite said 2264 days ago (July 10th, 2011)
groovy
thanks KC, glad you enjoyed it! - darren
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Moviz said 2264 days ago (July 10th, 2011)
Nothing wrong
with your voice....... it suits the song and a great style you have,,,,, love the simplicity of the guitar and and vocal and then the harmonies/ doubling and solo really bring colour into it..... love it, regards M
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urbnite said 2264 days ago (July 10th, 2011)
M
thanks moviz for the kind words. :) the solo actually came from a whistling part, but i decided it'd be better as a guitar part once i was able to multitrack.
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tempie said 2264 days ago (July 11th, 2011)
love it
you've got a great voice dude, but i guess nobody likes listening to their own voice. but really, i like your phrasing and the vibrato, eccentric but a pleasure to listen to. also really like the tune. great playing, great changes. wish i could download it :)
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urbnite said 2264 days ago (July 11th, 2011)
danke!
thanks craig! like i said to papag, i might futz with the mix more and put up a downloadable version. i do, i'll let you know. :)
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mowguy3 said 2264 days ago (July 11th, 2011)
If I could Write A Love Song
Nice track..Solid write and I like the vox. hat's off....
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urbnite said 2264 days ago (July 11th, 2011)
:)
thanks russ!
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gator4040 said 2264 days ago (July 11th, 2011)
love song
dude, you sound great and the lyrics are very cool. I agree some of the other comments regarding the spacing of the guitars. Keep on singing!
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urbnite said 2264 days ago (July 11th, 2011)
fixed
thanks man - and yeah, i've actually tweaked the mix a bit. fixed that guitar issue and just kind of got stuff balanced a bit better. maybe i'll upload it later. thanks again. later gator!
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Social_Ice said 2257 days ago (July 18th, 2011)
"what if" ??...........
i just love this......comprised of melodies, lyrics, and vague optimism about the "What ifs" in life.... Much In joy'd!!! ~barbara
Social_Ice said 2257 days ago (July 18th, 2011)
wunderful vox too....
and your vocals are right on....wouldn't change a thing.
urbnite said 2256 days ago (July 19th, 2011)
joy
thanks for the lovely comments barbara. glad you in joy'd. :)

'vague optimism'... that sort of describes me. lol
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Char said 2139 days ago (November 13th, 2011)
There's not
a thing wrong with your voice. It has a sweetness and honesty. Nice guitar, too. Thanks.
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urbnite said 2139 days ago (November 13th, 2011)
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maybe it's kind of like listening to yourself in a video or whatever - it never sounds quite like it does in your head!
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i'm just a guy stumbling through life. that stumbling (and some early dragging by my parents) took me all over the world, but i seem to have settled in san francisco for a while at least. i've been on macjams for quite a while now - not sure where... [see more]

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