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| Warren Smith said 1746 days ago (February 14th, 2005) | |
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Solid vocal To both of you, thanks for responding. This retelling of an old tale attempts to be many things - literary, humorous, narrative, lyrical, inventive, colloquial and true to the story, but certainly not a literal translation. By trying to be too much, perhaps it risks becoming nothing. But it represents an effort at trying something new with music for me (prose story-telling set to music), and it's been an engaging experiment. I appreciate your suggestions, and I will keep those ideas in mind when I revisted the piece. As for word choice, settling on an appropriate word to describe the overt intimate action prevalent in the generally actionless story (this is no account of "arms and the man" in a Western sense of drama), "boink" became the default choice out of many possibilities, partially because it is ambiguous, partially because it is inoffensive and partially because it seems musical. Maybe the piece should have been categorized as "adult." Check out my latest song called Pushing and Pulling
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| Joanna said 1645 days ago (May 26th, 2005) | |
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Boink-o-rama! What a fascinating piece. I loved the storytelling, and the music was very well done. I do have to agree with the others that the balance was off. The music was very loud on my speakers and the voice rather soft. For a piece so focused on storytelling, that has to take center stage. The music should be the backdrop, not the star. But you had a great idea and I liked much of the execution. Check out my latest song called Nellie G.
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Kinda funny. Quite theatrical. I could enjoy this more if the
narrator's voice were a little louder and resonant. The
music, as enjoyable as it is, is too dominant. The stereo
separation is perfect. Ukifuni gets boinked? This is a literal
scholarly translation? Hah!