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PatriciaGirl

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A little piece I worked on a while ago with a friend that laid down some voice tracks but we never finished. So this is an unfinished piece. Any and all critiques are welcomed. I hope you will enjoy it.
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Lyrics
Sunshine
In your hair
and in your pretty green eyes
and in your wonderful smile
and in your beautiful voice
and in your wonderful mind

Sunshine
In your hair
I capture you in my hands
I capture you in my hands
In my hands, in my hands
In my hands, in my hands

Solo

Sunshine
In your hair
and in your pretty green eyes
and in your wonderful smile
and in your beautiful voice
and in your wonderful mind…

End
Lyrics and voice by Jake
Piano by Patricia
Song Stats
Hits: 2990
Comments: 69
Fans: 38
Plays: 339
Downloads: 70

Uploaded: Mar 27, 2012 - 02:09:41 AM
Last Updated: Mar 27, 2012 - 02:09:41 AM Last Played: Jul 28, 2017 - 11:29:56 PM
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Hardware:
Roland X8
MacBook Pro
Software:
Logic Express
Comments
PeterB7858 said 2068 days ago (March 27th, 2012)
Soothing
Hi Patty. I listened to this and went to comment and then realised I wasn't logged in :-) Soothing was the word that came to mind. The mellow piano and subtle strings provide a fitting soundscape for Jake's gentle vocals. The artwork suits it to a tee. Unfinished? Sounds pretty good as is. Take care, Peter.
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PatriciaGirl said 2068 days ago (March 27th, 2012)
Hi Peter
Thanks so much for taking the time to listen =) The unfinished parts are more musical; thinking that it may have needed another verse. There were some vocal parts that didn't seem to fit so I removed them, maybe I'll add them back in the future.

patty
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Narad said 2068 days ago (March 27th, 2012)
Sunshine
As nice as sunshine ! :)
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PatriciaGirl said 2068 days ago (March 27th, 2012)
Hi Narad
Thanks for the nice comment-appreciate it!
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CIASM_ZENABI_ said 2068 days ago (March 27th, 2012)
sunshine
some really great moving chord changes and the vocals go so well. great piano notes and accompaniment. great playing/singing, well recorded. has a strong emotion carried through. enjoyed it cheers graham
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PatriciaGirl said 2068 days ago (March 27th, 2012)
Hi Graham
Thanks so much for the lovely comment. I am glad that the mix especially for the vocal track turned out okay. It's always a challenge to adjust the EQ for that. So happy you enjoyed it =)

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Reinholt56 said 2068 days ago (March 27th, 2012)
Hi Patty......
Very nice piano work and the lyrics were rhythmically interesting. One, three, six and seven all came to mind whilst listening to and reading the lyrics.

Take care.

Paul
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PatriciaGirl said 2068 days ago (March 27th, 2012)
Hiya Paul
Thanks for listen and comment. Second, I wish I were more knowledgeable about music to produce more conventional music, but I am still learning. I am just glad that my friend was kind enough to lay down tracks for me.

Thanks again!
patty
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Parichayaka said 2068 days ago (March 27th, 2012)
Remarkable
You've got a really strong chord structure, songwriting and sound here! The piano playing supports the vocals incredibly well and I really like the subtle synth touches.

The doubled vocals and effects are perfect for the song. I even took the lyrics as a lyrical ode to nature - to the beauty sunshine creates on this vast canvas - and they still worked!

On a technical note, I would tweak with the reverb to see if there is any way to have parts of the song with a more transparent, less reverb heavy quality to offset the weightless atmosphere, just for a few bars. I'd also bring the vocals back before the very ending of the song. Obviously these are just ideas in my head.

Reminds me of Gary Jules's take on 'Mad World', except this song is full of hope and wonder.
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PatriciaGirl said 2068 days ago (March 27th, 2012)
Hi
Thank you very much for the constructive comment I great appreciate the help! On the reverb issue I totally agree that it may be heavy at times. Unfortunately, with the vocal tracks, the reverb is pre-recorded with them already, so I can’t remove them. If there is any way to cancel that I would love to hear suggestions.

The nature statement is a great way to see this piece, I liked that you caught that.

Gary Jules version of TFF Mad world is a great version that I like very much. I love the piano work in that tune.

Great ideas thanks for the suggestions!
patty

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Loob said 2068 days ago (March 27th, 2012)
I like this a lot!
You have a lot of talent. Both of you! I'd love to audition some parts and see what you think! Only thing I would do myself is cut back on the reverb just a little. Love to try some thing on this! Maybe?
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PatriciaGirl said 2068 days ago (March 27th, 2012)
Hello
Thanks for the nice comment and for the listen. Agreed, on the reverb issue thanks for the suggestions.

On the idea of adding to this piece I am always interested in what others would contribute. Please let me know what you need =)

patty
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Ex_Silentio said 2068 days ago (March 27th, 2012)
Sunshine
Gorgeous. Both the music and the vocals. Have to agree about the over-reverbing, however. I think that tends to inhibit the warmth of the vocals. But the piano and synths are perfecto in my humble O.
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PatriciaGirl said 2068 days ago (March 27th, 2012)
Hi Ex
Your humble opinion is greatly appreciated. Thanks for taking the time to listen and for the suggestions!

pg
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Soundhound said 2068 days ago (March 27th, 2012)
Yep.... This is really good...
Solid feel very real, nice chords on the keys cool mix very nice
blend of vocals and keys......Outstanding project.....
His voice fits your style like a glove, you guys should do more
songs together......Cause this is in the ball park.. :-) ...Wonderful...

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PatriciaGirl said 2068 days ago (March 27th, 2012)
Hi Soundhound
Thanks for the nice comment. Jake's voice is a nice fit. I hope to create more pieces in the future with him.

Take care,
pg
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Daugrin said 2068 days ago (March 27th, 2012)
Sunshine... shine.
I can hear a more adventurous use of tensions? Thanks for posting.
Rare and beautiful things are so important to people's mental health,
not just here, but everywhere, the commercial potential is here!

Daug


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PatriciaGirl said 2068 days ago (March 27th, 2012)
Hi Daug
To tell you the truth I'm not sure what you mean...what is tension? Sorry for my ignorance, but I have a lot to learn about music.

I agree it would be my wish to change the state of peoples mind if I could. There is so much beauty out there to experience and share it through music.

Thanks so much the nice comment.
patty
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alackbass said 2068 days ago (March 27th, 2012)
Sunshine
There's a great atmosphere to this. The piano is beautiful. Wonderful changes and melodies. I really like the vocals and the way you've layered them.
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PatriciaGirl said 2067 days ago (March 28th, 2012)
Hi
I am glad you liked it, thanks for the nice comment.
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Sigmund said 2068 days ago (March 27th, 2012)
Sunshine
Beautiful work in progress. I would echo the sentiment of others here - the reverb is a bit heavy. This could also benefit from a little bit of eq tweaking as it feels a bit much in the mid section - all my own opinion of course. I always find your work to be exceptional and this is no exception - enjoyed - thanks!
Sig
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PatriciaGirl said 2067 days ago (March 28th, 2012)
Hi Sig
Appreciate the comment and suggestion. We might have to redo the vocals to eliminate or tone down the reverb that was prerecorded in the track. Thanks again!
patty
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ShadowofNine said 2067 days ago (March 28th, 2012)
Sunshine
Delightful and Charming, and very enjoyable...
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PatriciaGirl said 2067 days ago (March 28th, 2012)
Thanks Shadow
For taking the time to listen, always appreciate it!
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grah3am said 2067 days ago (March 28th, 2012)
Pile it on
An impressive work in progress. I usually end up removing a ton of stuff, but this is already a spare production, so pile on the bagpipes towards the end and throw in the kitchen sink. Then remove them! That is my considered productorial opinion.
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PatriciaGirl said 2067 days ago (March 28th, 2012)
:) thanks
That's the fun part! Thanks for the suggestions!
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Bowman said 2066 days ago (March 29th, 2012)
A lovely
and haunting work Patricia.
I very much enjoyed this.
Cheers,
Charlie
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PatriciaGirl said 2066 days ago (March 29th, 2012)
Thanks Charlie
I am glad you had enjoyed this one.
patty
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magnatone said 2066 days ago (March 29th, 2012)
Sunshine
what fabulous piano work in this patty - i'm such a fan! i always know when i see a new post of yours that i'm going to love it, even before i hit "play"! congrats on this!
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PatriciaGirl said 2063 days ago (April 1st, 2012)
Hello Karen
Always appreciate the encouragement. Thanks for listen and the comment. Take care =)
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Philip18 said 2065 days ago (March 31st, 2012)
Sunshine
The vocal has an ethereal quality (probably the reverb influences that) but the words are still clear. Delightful piano lines. Warm backing from the synths. Beautiful.
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PatriciaGirl said 2063 days ago (April 1st, 2012)
Hi Philip
Thanks for the nice comment. I believe we are going to update this song soon with some new ideas and possible a collaboration from a member on macjams. I hope that this will be soon. Take care.

patty
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egobandit said 2064 days ago (March 31st, 2012)
How
Did I miss this, your friend has a very soothing voice, the piano is so warm and flowing all I can say is Beautiful!
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PatriciaGirl said 2063 days ago (April 1st, 2012)
Hi Ego
Thanks for the lovely comment. I'm sure my friend will appreciate the comment about his vocals. Take care.

patty
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Doug Somers said 2063 days ago (April 1st, 2012)
Sunshine
Love those harmonies, your piano treatment with the understated strings and of courses the vocal by Jake. There's a very comfortable dreaminess to this piece, with a kind of ancient fairytale feel to it as well - from a time when things were simpler and we noticed what and who were around us.

Lovely!
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PatriciaGirl said 2063 days ago (April 2nd, 2012)
Hi Doug
A very lovely and kind comment. I am trying to experiment with more simple approaches to music. Writing for vocals is different then writing for me-hehe hope you understand. I like the dreaminess part of your comment-that is really what I am looking for. Take care and thanks again =)

patty
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Henke said 2062 days ago (April 2nd, 2012)
Good job you two
Can't hear what's not finished with it, but who knows ;-) Very sweet.

Thanks,
Henke
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PatriciaGirl said 2062 days ago (April 2nd, 2012)
hi henke
Thanks for the encouragement. Freddy(loob) is adding more to this piece, so until then it is a work in progress. Hopefully, Jake will lay down some new vocals as well.
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michaeljayklein said 2062 days ago (April 2nd, 2012)
Sunshine
A masterpiece...
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PatriciaGirl said 2062 days ago (April 2nd, 2012)
So kind
A masterpiece...
unfinished piece is a "masterpiece" hmmm...if you say so. Also I can't wait until you unfan this piece like you do all my other pieces.


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chinaman2 said 2056 days ago (April 8th, 2012)
wowza
such a beautiful piece. nice collab. at first I thought there was too much reverb but upon further listening, I realized it gave it a ghostly touch, that heightened interest for the listener. at least for me. well done.
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PatriciaGirl said 2038 days ago (April 26th, 2012)
Thanks CM
I always appreciate your comments. The reverb thingy is sticky, some like it and others eh...I am glad it had worked to heightened interest in the listener. The ghostly or the supernatural comment I also liked. Thanks again.

pg
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Moviz said 2038 days ago (April 26th, 2012)
Funny
how you get a mental image from music..... this one is really lovely and while it's dreamlike, it's like a daydream.... I can see you as a silhouette, playing piano against a large open patio window with the sunlight almost blinding behind you, as someone potters around in slow motion outside in the garden..... and it's like it's your impression of his singing that we hear.... yes I'm quite mad LOL, but this is really lovely Patty, Love it, regards M
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PatriciaGirl said 2038 days ago (April 26th, 2012)
Hi M!!
What a wonderful and delightful daydream. I always love hearing how music invokes the imagination of others to envision beauty and natures wonders of love. And I love it that you are mad, because WE all are (artists with imaginations)to picture a world how it really should be full of love and compassion instead of the opposite.

Thanks for sharing your thoughts =)
pg
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paul f. page said 2032 days ago (May 2nd, 2012)
Such simplicity
that is beautifully crafted with those lush vocal harmonies. The vocal is very pretty and tenderly performed. All those subtle dissonances are quite wonderful, too. You've both taken some good time in delivering this song, rushing nothing, but letting the softness of the sentiment in your lyrics just play itself out with peace and such tranquility. One rather melts when hearing this kind of piece. (The picture art is perfect, too.) Thank you for letting me/us hear this beautiful, graceful song.
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PatriciaGirl said 2028 days ago (May 6th, 2012)
Thank you
So much for the wonderful comment, I always look forward to them!

When I heard Jake's tracks and how he took my simple phrases and turned them into something I felt was very serene-I was moved. We worked only a few times and I really wanted more vocals at the end, he simply said let's not and keep it as it is. I think that was a good idea.

Thanks again Paul
patty



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Social_Ice said 2030 days ago (May 4th, 2012)
shimmering.....
rays of shimmering light are beaming down upon this wonderful piece...even in its unfinished state.... staggering performance!! ~barbara
PatriciaGirl said 2028 days ago (May 7th, 2012)
Hi Barbara
So nice to always read your comments. Thanks for the nice words. I always feel better when basking in the rays of sunlight, especially when working in my mothers gardens.


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tokai said 2030 days ago (May 4th, 2012)
Sunshine
I miss the sunshine. Oh, those beautiful strokes of the Ivories are enough to bring a tear to my eye! Beautiful.
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PatriciaGirl said 2028 days ago (May 7th, 2012)
Hi Steve
I'm glad to share a little of this sunshine for ya here =) Thanks for the lovely comment. I hope to hear more creations from you soon. Take care.

pg
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mystrag said 2030 days ago (May 4th, 2012)
Dreamscape
Quite fascinating and dreamy. Very ethereal and nice vocal, and solid piano playing. Enjoyed much.
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PatriciaGirl said 2028 days ago (May 7th, 2012)
I'm glad
That you had enjoyed it, makes me happy =)

pg
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Franciscus_Henri said 2029 days ago (May 5th, 2012)
soundshine!
This is gentle and charming! I wouldn't be tempted to "finish" this. It's very strong as it is. You could run the risk of over kill.
Love it as it is.
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PatriciaGirl said 2028 days ago (May 7th, 2012)
You are right...
I agree as well, too much is sometime not a good thing. Thanks for listening and commenting.

pg
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KCsGROOVE said 2028 days ago (May 6th, 2012)
sunshine
I like it right from the first few chords :-)
strong melodic piece
dreamy with very nice vocals
Very much enjoyed!
KC

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PatriciaGirl said 2028 days ago (May 7th, 2012)
Hi KC
Thank you so much for listening. I am happy that you had enjoyed it. I love the dreamy part-isn't life but a dream? I think so =)

Take care
pg
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woofer3 said 2027 days ago (May 7th, 2012)
a ray of sunshine
Something we don't get much of here in the UK so this is a treat indeed. Lovely brooding and dramatic chords along with gentle and imaginative note selections and a beautiful vocal line. Very much enjoyed.
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PatriciaGirl said 2026 days ago (May 8th, 2012)
I hear that too
Thanks for taking a listen much appreciated =)
pg
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gadzooks said 2025 days ago (May 9th, 2012)
Sunshine
I think this is beautiful... well composed and well performed ... quite magical and ethereal. No critique from me....
Cheers
SG
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PatriciaGirl said 1954 days ago (July 19th, 2012)
Hi Stan
Thanks for the sweet comment! Hehe I will post a new anime pict on the next piece :)

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Doadars Uncle said 2025 days ago (May 9th, 2012)
Airy and warm
This is absolutely peaceful! Nice build to the solo. Then vocal weaves... !
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PatriciaGirl said 1954 days ago (July 19th, 2012)
Hiya
Jake did a great job putting up with my pesky notes lol...

Thanks for the listen and comment!

pg
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Garni said 1970 days ago (July 3rd, 2012)
Sunshine
WOW! Oh this is so beautiful!

G-)
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PatriciaGirl said 1954 days ago (July 19th, 2012)
Sunshine
Thank you thank you!
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papag said 1797 days ago (December 23rd, 2012)
love it
really
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PatriciaGirl said 1579 days ago (July 29th, 2013)
papag
TY :)
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peacepiano said 1634 days ago (June 4th, 2013)
Piano
Lovely piano playing. Piece sounds very developed to me (I am not much of a word smith but those work well too). Strings are very tastefully layered in. Great stuff.
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PatriciaGirl said 1634 days ago (June 4th, 2013)
peacepiano
Thank you so much for taking the time to listen and to comment. Really appreciate it.

patty
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tmcfate said 753 days ago (November 2nd, 2015)
epic
and well worth the listen My oh my, I have had a night. Thank you for raising the level of my evening.
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