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A song I literally dreamt up last week. Not totally finished, but good enough for some constructive criticism.
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Lyrics
When your feet don't touch the ground
You're running too fast
Take your time till you have found the things that last

I believe in love and peace and everything between
I believe in things that are not true
I believe that some folks are not really human beings
I believe in you
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Hits: 1758
Comments: 21
Fans: 10
Plays: 42
Downloads: 27
Votes: 0
Uploaded: Jun 29, 2013 - 09:16:21 PM
Last Updated: Jun 29, 2013 - 09:21:17 PM Last Played: Nov 01, 2018 - 01:43:16 AM
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Daugrin said 1967 days ago (June 29th, 2013)
Hello Graham
You made my day. The perfect answer to granola elitism. Looking for some twists in the second verse. Would you consider a middle eight?
Maybe some guitar stuff? If able saturate the surf guitar and add some more reverb, right before it gets really sloppy there is a sweet spot. The George Harrison approved bit is great, bus away the guitar track and start with a high pass filter. Once you have the highs isolated on the bus add saturation and harmonics then blend this back into the original track-sparkle!

Daug
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grah3am said 1967 days ago (June 29th, 2013)
Baffled
Sam Dixon mentioned a "high pass filter" in an elderly post, but I have no idea what it is. I will look it up. I agree that the slide bit is the best part - and I was very wary of putting it in at all! I'm after lush surf and sparkly slide in this. I'm happy you appreciate what I done so far - it's 12 hours and counting!
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Llarion said 1967 days ago (June 29th, 2013)
Since you're up for it..
I'm going to offer some constructive suggestions, because it's a very cool piece that, with some massage, will be something special. Some notes, as they occur to me...

1) Your hihat voice needs more articulation, it's just sort of wapwapwapwapwap, with no accent or anything to humanize it. soften it in the mix and add a shaker or something that gives the meter-keeper element a little more humanism.
2) Same thing with the crash cymbal you're using to punctuate the B section; I think I might try something less harsh there.
3) The lead vocal is VERY buried in the mix. You have nothing to fear, it sounds great; let that part come forward more, let it breathe.
4) There's nothing holding up the bottom of the groove. Both the kick drum and bass part are too subdued. I'm suspecting your monitoring system is less than optimal, it would explain a lot of what's going on here.
5)I love the question/answer vocal style, but as I stated before, the lead is underneath. The "answer" vocal is just fine.
6) Love the guitar work. I like that they are are spread wide; it adds to the sweet retro feel of the mix in general.
7) The song itself is very well constructive, with a Tears for Fears kind of vibe, and I love them, so good on ya there!

That may have sounded like a lot, but it's not; it's just some mix changes, and a little work on the drum track, and you have a home run there!
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grah3am said 1967 days ago (June 29th, 2013)
Less than optimal
is the word! I appreciate your comments very much. I'm always trying to improve my production skills. There's not a lot I can do with the bass, save replace it with something digital. (Or ask a friendly MacJammer to contribute.) It's day three on the song tomorrow. I will act on your suggestions. Cheers.
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VicDiesel said 1965 days ago (July 1st, 2013)
What the man says.
Hi-hat, vocals, bass. Otherwise cool song.
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Philip18 said 1967 days ago (June 30th, 2013)
Toot Sweet
I like the guitar tones, like the song, like the vocal, like the arrangement - so that's just about everything! I'll leave others to do the technical bits- and look forward to further versions! Great title, too!
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grah3am said 1967 days ago (June 30th, 2013)
Busy Sunday
ahead, acting on Larrion and Daug's suggestions, but it will be worth it. Thanks for listening, Philip.
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alackbass said 1967 days ago (June 30th, 2013)
Toot Sweet
I'm always so impressed by your writing. This one stands as one of your best written songs.
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grah3am said 1966 days ago (June 30th, 2013)
Nice of you to drop by
I appreciate your comments. I'm trying to figure out how to apply the technical ideas above. I think I'll start with the vocals.
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Vic Holman said 1966 days ago (June 30th, 2013)
Toot Sweet
groovy tune, very retro 60's which i can appreciate. there is a nod to george harrison that i pick up. a lot of good comments from the others. definitely worth taking it to the next level
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grah3am said 1966 days ago (June 30th, 2013)
Next level taken up
I spent the day learning about high pass and low pass filters and applied them judiciously. The bass is now free of bleats and farts, I've fixed the annoying cymbal and done lots and lots of other tweaks. It sounds pretty mighty on the car stereo now. Hats off to Llarion and Daugrin for leading me into even more interesting corners of the Garage. I'll repost when I'm reasonably happy I can do no more. Thanks for your time, Vic.
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Doug Somers said 1966 days ago (June 30th, 2013)
Sweet indeed
Nice tune here Graham - love the 60s influenced vibe with more a more modern wrapper. Vocals and instruments all sound well executed for a really engaging listen. I'm nowhere near competent to talk about the mix but it sounds like Daug and Llarion have your back on that one. Good tune!!
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grah3am said 1966 days ago (June 30th, 2013)
You're dead on
Those two guys have given me some extremely useful insights into production, and the results sound great to me. Then I listened to Vic's "Wire." Sigh. There is SO much to learn! Thank you for listening.
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CIASM_ZENABI_ said 1966 days ago (July 1st, 2013)
toot sweet
authentic cool 60s vibe. well played.
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grah3am said 1966 days ago (July 1st, 2013)
Thank you
I was going for Beach Boys meet Beatles, and ended up with The Shadows, which is fine by me.
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Les_Kloo said 1965 days ago (July 1st, 2013)
Toot sweet
Love it. Nothing to add to the technical discussion --- but I agree with the Llarion's comments regarding the cymbals and the vocal level. Your vocals need the spotlight here. Did you really dream the song before you went to work on it? My dreams are never useful.
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grah3am said 1965 days ago (July 1st, 2013)
I dreamed a dream
Not only did I dream the vocal hook ("Running too fast"), but also my brain made me go back to sleep to figure out the rest of it. Somewhere it had the phrase "Tout de suite" in it, but I couldn't work it into anything but the title. This is the the third or fourth tune I've dreamed, but being old and feeble I can't remember which ones they were. The revamped version of the song sounds great to my ears, thanks to the gentlemen above. I'll post soon. I appreciate your comments as ever, Les.
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LisaHawbaker said 1960 days ago (July 6th, 2013)
toot
I don't write music but this is upbeat and fun. Takes me back to the 60's which I love. I'm a singer so I think you're voice is great and fits this well:)
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grah3am said 1960 days ago (July 6th, 2013)
Garsh
I'm very happy you enjoyed it, Lisa. There's a much better version called Tout de Suite, which stands as a lesson about good advice.
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TobinMueller said 1958 days ago (July 8th, 2013)
retro feel
It takes me back. Even the spring reverb sound. I dig the guitar work in the breaks. Could use a rounder sound, especially the vocals. And that cat looks like a killed! Her stare is still haunting me...
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grah3am said 1958 days ago (July 8th, 2013)
Tweety was a killer
She had rats, mice, snakes - anything that moved, including me. But she was more like a dog - followed me about, slept on my feet, guarded the ducks (ducks!). Science has proven she was actually the Best Cat Ever. Where was I? Thanks for checking it out, Tobin. The better version is also available here. The best version lurks on my iMac. I'll email it if anyone is really interested, but the McJams one isn't too bad.
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